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There's a rumble in the causeway
And the river trickles down
To the places of drought,
Mouths of a heart begging for love's moisture.

So do I love her?
I don't understand the question...
Am I in love with her?
I cannot say.

I know this:

She is the beauty
Of an unborn rose,
And yet I still
Gasp at her full bloom.

Every spotlight of an
Early morning sun on
Specks of dust in meditation
Bring the light in her eyes to a weary soul...

You see a body and conditions.
I see a four winged Seraphim with
Flaming sword.
I am tempered by design to see her truth.

My existence contains a unique hole,
Worn by agony, longing, and sacrifice.
She is the remaining piece,
One that is nestled perfectly into it.

You have asked the wrong question.

Does a river fall in love
With the riverbed on which it flows?
They are created by perfection,
One to fit the other.

The cretins call to her worn oaths
Of that which they cannot comprehend,
While in the vessel of her heart
They leave extra weight and dirty scuff-marks.

I am distinct from them.
I will not say I am in love with her.
"In love" is simply an aggravated
Version of "like".

The sharp daggers of my life,
Held in grubby paws of enemies
That dare to beset me from all sides
Melt into the steam of her single touch.

I have been burned,
Broken, refined.
She is deeper than my blood,
Coursing feverishly from a glance.

So my desire for her is the
Waves gently lapping her hull-
Then let my love, my hope, my peace
Be the vast oceans she sails upon.

Did I answer the question?
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This is amazing T. Out of everything I have read from you, and that has been too many to mention, I love this one best. It moved me in ways that I thought were behind me and made me think. I want to rave about the piece and tell you all that it made me feel, but I guess just letting you know that it just made me feel will have to be enough. Beautiful, amazing, wonderful.

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Just when the caterpillar thought the world was over, she became a butterfly.
:blush: Thanks! I was worried I was losing it there...

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May one thousand flaming monkeys depart
Swiftly from your sparkly jewelled ass.
Well not here, but I know what you feel like. I feel as if I have lost it and I am swimming in the " what used to be" pool

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Just when the caterpillar thought the world was over, she became a butterfly.
I have to agree with you on this one, L. Absolutely breathtaking in the depth of feeling and emotion. I am not gifted in the written word as you all are but it evokes thought and thoughtfulness. Would that I had such talent, you all would be sick of seeing my writing :) No such luck for me, though. I am stuck with so many things to say and frustrated by the inability to say exactly what I mean.

Genius writing....

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And this, too, shall pass...
:blush: Awww... Thanks! That's worth a lot... especially from you! :)

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She was cute, and fuzzy,
And for some reason she
Wouldn't let me touch her...
:(
I'd say that I've missed this, but I can't have as I've not seen anything quite like this from you before. You've taken it up a notch, this is really something special.

I just can't believe that it's taken me this long to read it.

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365Tomorrows - A new piece of short SciFi fiction each day
^lovetodeviate : Resources for Writers
dA is for the literary arts, too.
Awesome piece-a refreshingly new view on the most ancient of topics.
Thank you! :)

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She was cute, and fuzzy,
And for some reason she
Wouldn't let me touch her...
:(

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